This writing was composed at 9-7-2012. I was special thanked to Miss Wong of the Maria English Society. I told her I was planning to join the TOEIC class but it still couldn't come into existence due to the reasons either no money or no time. I am sorry about that.
I am now copied my composition to my diary in order to respect her.
This composition was 1 of all questions at the Aptitude test
Question: Write a short commentary about the last fun holiday or vacation you went on. (Minimum of 150 words) Remember to write legibly and use the proper tenses, spelling and Punctuation.
My compositon.
I rared to go vacation since I had left secondary school. But in these ten some years, the place that outside Hong Kong that I have been to is Macau for few times. Everytime I went Macau by ferry and started walking from Macau ferry pier to Areia Preta. I enjoyed walking rather than taking vehicles. It was because I was in a relaxing mood. I had more time to view the fascinating window shops and views. I could notice them more carefully and more detail. I always had my lunch tea time or dinner in Macau's local restarants. There were one thing that let me surprise is that I found the car race machine that I couldn't be found in Hong Kong Western to Mongkok. This car race machine was the only one machine I loved to play inside game machine shop. I spent thirty dollars for driving. After playing the game it was almost at night. And I had to come back to Hong Kong. Therefore I started walking from Areia Preta to Macau ferry pier. I never brought gifts at there because I didn't know what I wanted to or had to or decided to buy because there was no necessary to spend extra money from buying such things. I hope to stay in Macau for overnight in Macau but I was not willing to stay in hotel room alone. Hope there is no need to come back so early.
Amended by Miss Wong
I rarely go on vacation since I have left secondary school. But in the last ten years, the only place outside Hong Kong that I have been to is Macau a few times. Everytime I went to Macau by ferry and started walking from Macau ferry pier to Areia Preta. I enjoyed walking rather than taking vehicles. It was because I was in a relaxed mood. I had more time to view the fascinating window shops and scenery. I could view them more carefully and more detail. I always had my lunch, tea time or dinner in Macau's local restaurants. There was one thing that left me surprised that I found the race cars that I couldn't see in Hong Kong from Hong Kong Western to Mongkok. This race car was the only one I loved to play inside arcade games shop. I spent thirty dollars on driving. After playing the games it was almost night. And I had to come back to Hong Kong. Therefore I started walking from Areia Preta to Macau ferry pier. I never brought gifts there because I didn't know what I wanted to or had to buy because it was not necessary to spend extra money buying such things. I hope to stay in Macau overnight but in Macau I was not willing to stay in a hotel room alone. Hope there is no need to come back so early next time.
Remarks :
written on August 2013
- I was very appreciated to Miss Wong because she corrected my writing free of charge.
- I felt ashamed when I saw my answer paper.
- I never think I could make so many mistakes for such a simple writing.
- I didn't know why such a common topic that made me upset when I was composing the writing.
- This was a reason that pushed me to have written over 50 diaries in last 12 months.
- This might be a reason that I could have ability to have obtained over 700 marks this year as well because I was seriously to study grammer books.
- The style of this writing was similiar to the style I was studied at the secondary school, but most of the difficult words and patterns that I had learnt at secondary schools I was forgot when I was writing this composition.
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